Devilin gave a look of surprise to his wife Angelica, the famous dietitian, and said “I get to drink a Pepsi with your prescribed diet?”
She said, “A little reward for you is the best way to keep you on your diet.” She didn’t say, And a big reward for me is that it’s the best way to smother the sweet taste of ethylene glycol.
He grinned and enjoyed his last supper.
She added, “Good night, dear.” She didn’t add See you in the morning.
Writer’s note: My future agent (hey, it’s my blog, I can dream) told me I have a tendency to repeat myself. I think it comes from a device I use in copywriting called parallel construction. You see it used in the story above in the second and fourth paragraphs.
In copywriting, it works well to create a rhythm in the reader’s mind and get your brand across without being dull. Dream Agent argues that the reader doesn’t need it in fiction. Moreover, doesn’t want it. I’m apparently a slow learner. But if the first step is recognition, I’m on my way to a cure!
Come on back tomorrow for “E.”